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Tuesday, 7 November 2017

The OceanMaker

Yesterday our class were learning about what a narrative is and what a narrative needs. Then we had to watch a short animated video and base our story off of that.

What does a narrative need?

  • Beginning
  • Middle
  • End
  • 1st or 3rd Person Point of View
  • Personification
  • Similies
  • Metaphors
  • ISPACE
  • Problem
  • Solution

Here is the Video -
(Watch until 1:46 then pause it, read my story. Then you can go back and watch the rest.)









This is the Success Criteria -

Name    Laura                                                                  Peer Marker: Chloe
Success Criteria - Narrative
Features of Text
Student
Peer
  • I have included a beginning, middle and an end.


  • I have created a setting by showing with my words or using who, what, when & where.
yes

  • I have included a problem & solved it (or created good tension)
yes

  • I have written a satisfying ending.


  • I have written in either 1st person or 3rd person.
3rd

  • I have used descriptive language throughout  (sets of 3, alliteration, similes, personification, metaphors) and provided detail to my story.
I tried

  • I have used a range sequencing connectives. (time words or phrases)
yes

My Personal Target/s:
Power words
Sentence Starters



What I think I did well:  I think i did well paragraphing.
What my partner thinks I’ve done well: using big words to de
What I think I need to improve next time: I think next time I need to add more adjectives and interesting words.
What my partner thinks I need to improve next time: maybe  some ISPACE in


Here is my story - 

Today was Tuesday the 13th of May. It has been a dry, tiring day in the desert. Macy was a tall, courageous girl with a bright and bubbly personality. She wasn’t afraid of what might happen on her missions. Instead she was hopeful she would find something mysterious; leading to investigation.
Today Macy was in the middle of nowhere looking for any indications of life. She was flying her plane when she heard puttering noises coming from the failing engine. She had no way of fixing it before the plane crashed. So she pulled out her binoculars and searched the area for a place to land. Her eyes were red from rubbing them. She was exhausted. That’s when a light flickered. Frantically she grabbed her binoculars once again and lifted them up into sight. That was when she saw a lighthouse in the distance. She began to grow hopeful, hopeful of what might be in there or if there’s anything to help her with her mission. At that very moment the light from the lighthouse pointed towards something. She turned around. It was pointing towards a rain cloud.
The thought of seeing rain made Macy pleased because there obviously hadn’t been any rain here for a while. The plane bounded through the sky, that’s when she realised what had happened. The engine had malfunctioned; causing it to crash into a building. She didn’t know what type of building it was until she got out of her plane and looked around. The smoke caused her breathing to be a struggle. Eventually she had made her way out of the cloud of smoke and into the open air. She walked through the sand. Within minutes she realised what building she crashed into. The Lighthouse!
She walks into the lighthouse and begins to investigate the premises. Huge, hairy spiders creeping the stairwells. Waddling up the stairs. She makes her way to the tip of the lighthouse and sees a dog. The dog sprints towards her, pushes her down to the ground and begins to lick her sweaty face. Macy calls the dog and he begins to follow her lead. They walk down the stairs, around the corner and out the door.
Suddenly, the dog sees the big rain cloud. He leaps into the sky and flies over to the cloud. And boom out of nowhere he grabs the cloud with his sharp teeth and drags it over to this big hole where it looks like an ocean used to be.
Thankfully the dog annoyed the cloud so much it began to rain. They were filled with joy!
The End



Thank you for reading my story. It would be very helpful to have feedback on what I did well and what I could improve on.





Friday, 20 October 2017

Uru Mānuka logo design

This week our class got given the task to design and create 4 logos each and present them to the class.
The logos are for our cluster Uru Mānuka.
I used Google Drawings and Logomaker.
I would really like your feedback on what I did well and what I can improve on and maybe any tips for next time?







Monday, 14 August 2017

Timetable



Here is my timetable. 
My timetable shows what I have to focus on and what I'm working on that block.


Tuesday, 8 August 2017

Book Award Day



Today our class went to St Margaret's to see 6 finalists from the NZ Book Awards.
They gave us a description of what the books were about and some read a snippet of the book.
Here are some of the Authors/Illustrators:

Tania Roxborough - She is a children's writer who has written around 25 books.

David Elliot - Is an Award winning Author and Illustrator
who has written and illustrated 7 picture books.

Leonie Agnew - The Impossible Boy
It took 8 years to write this book.

Simon Pollard -  is a successful children’s book author, spider expert and natural history writer.

Jenny Cooper - is an award-winning illustrator of more than 70 children's books.

Des Hunt - Sunken Forest is his book. It is based 60 years ago. It is based on him when he was 13 years. He went to a Summer Camp and Lake Waikaremoana. It is surrounded by bush and has a great walk of NZ.

My favourite author was Des Hunt because I found his description of his book very intriguing and he had a lot of interesting photos about what his book was about.








Thursday, 3 August 2017

Netball Zones


Wednesday 2nd August


On Wednesday we had Zones for Netball.
We played at the Rolleston College Netball Courts.
The games started at 10:30 AM.
And each game went for 5 minutes each way.

We had a lot of fun playing our first few games until it started to rain.
It was a lot harder to play while it was raining because the ball was very slippery.
We were meant to have 5 games but only ended up having 4 because the last game was cancelled.





Monday, 24 July 2017

The Holidays



During the school holidays, I stayed at home most of the time. I went to the mall twice but that was about it. 
In the first week it snowed. It snowed all night and morning. The next day my Mum wouldn't let me go outside in the snow with my sister because I was sick.
So I stayed in bed. 

I was sick mainly all holidays so I didn't do much.
On the 19th I went bowling with Hannah, Prudence, Grace, and Bree for Hannah's Birthday. I enjoyed spending time with my friends for the first time all holiday. Later on we went back to Hannah's house and did Karaoke. Then we had dinner; it was a Pizza Cake.
Then we watched a movie. 
We had gotten about 20 minutes into the movie and I ended up getting a migraine so I ended up going home.

The rest of the holidays I spent most of my time in bed sleeping, and listening to music.